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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Adolescence/Teen Years (07/16/09)

TITLE: My Life is Over, All Because of a Zit
By Debbie Thorkildsen
07/23/09


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“Eww, you have a huge zit on your nose.”

Shelley would notice. She noticed everything. How could she not notice? I had noticed it myself when I’d first looked in the mirror this morning. I mean, it was sitting right there on the end of my nose. Who wouldn’t notice? I really didn’t mind that Shelley noticed my latest hormonal growth, but did she have to make such a big deal out of it and point it out for everyone within earshot, especially in the busy hallway at school? That was so embarrassing. I guess I should have been prepared for Shelley’s reaction. We’ve been best friends for two years now, so this happens all the time.

Mark did the same thing at the breakfast table this morning. “Gross, what’s that thing growing on your nose? Is that a huge zit?” I think Mom and Dad had already noticed, but they’d done the polite thing - looked the other way and didn’t mention it. I tried to ignore Mark's questions, but it really got to me when he laughed hysterically as he said, “If you pop that thing, it I could make a whole bowl of breakfast just like Mom and Dad are eating.” That really grossed me out because they were eating oatmeal porridge.

“You have no right to talk to me like that. I wish I didn’t have you for a brother. You just wait till you have your own pizza face. Then you’ll be sorry. Go ahead and enjoy your Flakes cereal, especially since my scab collection is missing…”

“Hey, Daydreamer, ya wanna… oh wow, that’s a… well… uh… are you going… uh… are you going to the dance on Friday night?”

As I looked up, I felt a little flip in my tummy. I’d been waiting for Dave to ask me to go to a school dance all year. “Uh… I was hoping… uh… I was planning to go.”

“Okay, I’ll see ya there.” Dave slipped into his homeroom just as the bell rang.

Katie was waiting for me outside the door of our homeroom class. She always waited for me. “Hey, you’ve got…”

“I know, I know, I have a huge zit on my nose.” I threw my books down on my desk.

“Actually, I was going to say, you’ve got to try the new spicy fries in the cafeteria. They’re so good.” Katie slipped into her desk and opened her notebook.

This zit is ruining my day, possibly even my whole week with the dance coming up on Friday and no date to go with. Dave has probably lost interest in me now that he’s seen how ugly I am. He probably won’t bother to ask me to go to another dance all year. My life is over, all because of a zit.


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Sarah Fehr07/23/09
Oh, those were the days!
Nikki Rosen07/23/09
love this. zits and all. I can almost hear you laughing while writing it or should I say reading it. :}
Jackie Wilson07/25/09
You did a great job of expressing all those teenage feelings. (I vaguely remember those feelings!)
Laura Manley07/26/09
Absolutely adorable story! I was blessed in not having acne, but I now have a teenage granddaughter who is going through those struggles. Good job! Laura
diana kay07/27/09
good one from the title on wards! Thanks
Jacob Drollinger07/27/09
It's cute, but not so cute. I had the problem that the main character had when I was a teen. My complexion was clear, for the most part, but when I got a pimple... I had attempted suicide three times by the time I was 18.
diana kay07/30/09
well done on the highly commended place. Keep writing this well and you will soon be onto the next level!
Catrina Bradley 07/30/09
I enjoyed this one a LOT! The voice is great, and you made me smile. Congratulations on your HC award! :)