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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Adolescence/Teen Years (07/16/09)

TITLE: Eating out
By Ken John
07/23/09


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Eating Out

Having grown up in the town-ship on the outskirts of Johannesburg, that is the northern side of the Northern Suburbs, where large middle-class homes snuggle between tennis courts and private swimming pools, primary schools with multiple grassy playing fields and well-stocked shops and freshly tarred roads criss-cross in suburban order.

Where not far away, just across a main road and around a corner, first world ideals shattered and reformed themselves into dust rutted, corrugated alleys, trash strewn and cardboard and corrugated iron shacks stand back to back near the odd tap where buckets fill and puddles like open sores seep and muddy over where children play and smells well with oozing ferocity.

Having grown up where comrades ruled the streets with a wild, violent justice and white khaki clad soldiers with machine guns patrolled day and night to ‘keep the peace’; where dysfunctional families smiled and played in happy-go-lucky winsome earnestness.

Then it was with a kind of awe that I picked up the menu and read down the long list of various dishes and flipped over to the back page and saw a familiar name, Coca-Cola and then glancing over at the ‘Salad Valley’ bar, pointed and said, “ lets start there.”


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Sarah Fehr07/23/09
Can't say I really understood the punchline, but all-in-all it's a powerful short piece. Great, image-forming descriptions!
Laura Manley07/26/09
Forgive me, but I am a little confused as to what your story has to do with the topic for the Writing Challenge. Your imagery is good, but I just have missed something in this story. Laura
diana kay07/27/09
Very good descriptions and so good material here but too many unanswered questions. Why was this teen eating her and with whom. Was it a first date? Some mystery can be good but there was room in the word count to expand this a little. Well done and keep writing!