The Official Writing Challenge
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07/23/09
Sounds like a typical weekend with teenage boys. The details like the stale pizza and the pepsi were good, adding some great snatches of reality to make this more believable. Good job.
07/25/09
The conversation and attitudes were very realistic. Enjoyed the scenes you described.
07/29/09
This story comes to life with dialog. Sounds like real Teens in real Family life to me. Like Teens, there's more training needed. But while I read this, I was longing for a Pizza!!!