The Official Writing Challenge
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Short and direct, you singled out one emotion and drilled it out. Pretty good, but a bit short-lol, I wanted to know a little more about her and if things would be okay, or get better now that she had someone who cared about her. Good stuff.
Very well expressed intense feelings. I would have liked a little more, too, but, even this short, it was good.