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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Summer (the season) (07/09/09)

TITLE: It Was All Hers
By Gracie Sparks
07/15/09


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Naomi picked up the small yellow envelope and tried to break the seal with a nail file. After two failed attempts, she gave the seal a vigorous rip with her hands. Her mouth hung open, her eyes widened in amazement and marveled at the beauty of its contents. There was cash! Thirty-five ones to be exact, and it was all hers. Naomi and Donna found the envelope three blocks from Naomi’s house, right in front of El Charro’s Parking Lot.

“What we gonna do with all this money?” Donna asked.

For Naomi, summer in Littleton usually meant running through water sprinklers, making mud pies, or catching frogs outside with her best friend Donna. She never imagined she would have other options.

“Did you hear me? What we gonna do with it?”

Naomi knew exactly what she wanted to do. This could be the year she’d finally attend “Summer Fest” at Lovejoy Park. There would be live entertainment, good food, and exciting rides including “The Vortex“. Everyone from Jackson Middle School would be there. Unfortunately, Mama wouldn’t give her the money to go, and $35 wouldn’t cover both her and Donna.

“What about the mall?” asked Naomi.

“Seven hours at South Pointe Mall? C’mon Nay, be serious!”

“Yeah, you’re right. That is lame.”

“Splash Water Park is only $10 to get in. How about we go there?”

Naomi liked the idea. She knew the small water park wouldn’t compare to “Summer Fest”, but it was a clever way to soak up some sun and stay cool at the same time. Besides, there were only two days until her thirteenth birthday. This would be an early celebration!

Naomi put the money in the safest place she knew, her Hello Kitty wallet inside her jungle print purse. Both girls rushed home, put on their bathing suits, and headed down the road.

This day would be especially hot, humid, and sticky. The air hung there, stagnant without even a hint of the slightest breeze. Both girls agreed their first stop should be the Peppermint Stick Ice Cream Parlor on Third Ave. Both decided to have a double scoop with chocolate and strawberry. They didn’t say much during the bus ride, but they both knew one thing for sure, excitement lay ahead.


The screams of summer were upon them as they approached Splash Water Park. The lines weren’t terribly long and appeared to be worth the wait. Naomi and Donna laughed and screamed in delight as they plunged down a six story triple dip slide. “The Wave” gave them a quick rush of adrenaline. When things got too hot they visited the indoor arcade for a bit. Once inside, they cheered each other on at “Mr. Froggy” and rode in the two-seater “Ride to Venus”. When finished, they gave each other a satisfied knowing nod as if they had just successfully conquered the world!

Sounds of mid summer filled the air, trills, chirps, short scratchy sounds. The girls lounged on an inner tube and floated down the man made river around the park. This day was amazing. Even so, Naomi still couldn’t help but be envious of the fun her classmates and other friends were probably having at Summer Fest.

Mama had a rule about being home before the street lights came on, so Naomi and Donna headed home once evening approached. Their bus fare depleted what was left of the found money.

“I guess it’s back to playing in water sprinklers tomorrow, huh? Naomi muttered to Donna.

“Guess so.”

“See ya tomorrow.”

“Bye girl.”

Naomi managed to get home just as the street lights flickered on.

“Hey Mom.”

Too exhausted to hold a long conversation, Naomi wanted it to end there.

“How was your day?” Mom asked.

“Great.”

“What’d ya do?”

“Just hang out.”

After gulfing down her dinner, Naomi headed to bed. As she drifted off, she overheard mama talking on the phone.

“I can‘t find it anywhere. It was in an envelope inside my pocket. I must’ve dropped it somewhere on my way home yesterday. Huh? Yeah girl $35... I know. It was supposed to be part of her birthday surprise. I was going to take her to Summer Fest.”


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Anita van der Elst07/16/09
Very nicely done. I didn't see that coming.
Laury Hubrich 07/20/09
Ouch. What a lesson to be learned. I wondered if you were going to address the found money issue. Very well done:)