The Official Writing Challenge
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07/09/09
Lovely tender story.
I LOVE this story!! I'm not sure what to say, it was beautiful!
Very nice--you've done a great job of freezing this moment in time.
07/12/09
Beautiful story! Watch your punctuation and spacing....some paragraphs are longer than others - it would be better if they were all consistent. You may also want to work more on "showing" instead of "telling" - let your readers discover your characters through their words and actions. Nicely done! Keep writing.
07/15/09
lovely. I think you have the character of the child nicely painted,
At least one more visitor laughing and crying. Genuine and delightful. What a wonderful way to meet God.