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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Retreat (as in quiet time away) (08/01/05)

TITLE: Temptations
By Oladele Atoyebi


"Mum, I won't be eating now. Please let it wait till I get back"
Greg called back to his mum as he was almost late to catch the bus.
He had told her the previous night, of his plans to go to the quiet hills downtown to meditate and be alone with God. He liked it that way and decided he would go through it this time, fasting.
Fighting back the urge and the enticing aroma of his mother's stew, he raced out of the house just in time to catch the bus.
At 21, Greg was agile as expected of a youth and jumped on the bus as it was moving away.
All through the journey, he listened to a favourite gospel music while looking forward to a great day with God.
When the bus reached his destination, he got down and began the lonely trip uphill. It was still in the early hours of the day and there were few people around.
He settled for his desired spot beneath the shade of a tree and began enjoying the moments he had longed for.
Just about half an hour into his meditations and prayers, someone walked up to him.
It wasn't an angel,no, but a young lady he took for a tourist.
Unknown to him that she actually
came intentionally seduce to him, he broke his communion with God and began chatting away with her under the guise of desiring to share the gospel with her.
From the weather and the terrain to the beautiful places in the country, they discussed on and on for a couple of hours.
He seemed to have forgotten his reason for being there. Even when, she offered a bottle of fruit juice, all he could say was "thanks but I don't take mango juice."
He had forgotten that he was fasting.
"Will you like to meet my friends?" she asked. "we are here on excursion and sightseeing."
"Yes," he said enthusiastically.
Then they arose and he followed her, "like a sheep to the slaugther"
When he got to her friends, they were all females dressed in skimpy clothes.
He sat with them and even enjoyed their dirty jokes. It was only when they were about to serve their meal of chicken soup that he remembered his mum's that he abandoned in the morning.
He checked his watch and realised eight hours had passed since he stopped
praying. How terrible!
He jumped up alarmingly and excused himself. They persuaded him to stay but, thanks to the good Lord, he fled and spent the rest of his time begging God for forgiveness.

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Phyllis Inniss08/08/05
Saved by God's bell, Thankfully God's power in him was stronger than the seducer's. Good entry.
Debra Brand08/08/05
Flee from temptation! Good thing God gives us a conscience. Good example.
dub W08/11/05
Very interesting, the construction not withstanding, the story kept my attention.
Shannon Redmon08/12/05
Good story. Would like to hear more dialog between MC and God, MC and girl, MC and himself. Nice entry.
Shari Armstrong 08/12/05
A very interseting story - and a good lesson. One thing, just space the paragraphs for an easier read :)
Beth Muehlhausen08/13/05
A good commentary on conviction and temptation. Try watching for formatting glitches, and space your paragraphs for a more comfortable read. Glad the young man came to his senses in time!!!
Nina Phillips02/27/06
That is a very honest story, and one that teaches us lessons also. Glad the story ended with him realizing what was happening, how the devil practices to decieve. God bless ya, littlelight