The Official Writing Challenge
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This was pretty good, it started out well, but the very last paragraph seemed too, um, cliche? I already understood that Elaine had "gotten" it without her having to explain that it was the little things that mattered-your dialog already told the reader that, so it was kind of obvious, otherwise, pretty good read. I loved the descriptions about her life and the atmosphere you worked in.
This was nicely written and it reminded us to keep the things of God in the forefront of our lives.
I enjoyed this, especially the verse about doing all things as unto the Lord. Life changes all the time, and finding ourselves in different stages (and ages) is a challenge to our priorities.. I like your message.
I enjoyed this story very much. I think I would have liked it even more if there had been a little more dialogue. I'm a Beginner as well, and I'm amazed at the talent in that group. You certainly are one of those people. Thank you for a lovely read. Laura