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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Bitter and Sweet (05/28/09)

TITLE: Consequential Choices
By MELISSA HENDREN
06/01/09


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Oh Dear Sister, Can you hear my heart sigh,
It was too soon in life, To have to tell you “Good Bye.”
It was too soon, To Spread your Ashes,
It was too soon, For us to cry.
It was too soon, To take your own life,
Not willing to, Harbour one last try!
When I look at your children, Seeing your face in them is so sweet,
Yet in their eyes, It such bitterness that you quit in defeat.
God knows your trials were more, Than any woman should bare,
When I try and feel you with me, In my dreams you are not there.
I am bitter that you chose Suicide, Instead of the Gift of Eternal Life,
I am bitter that you left a man, After 20 years as his wife.
I am bitter that we will never, Walk the streets paved in Gold,
You will not dine at the Kings table, As my napkin I unfold.
I lift my hands to Heaven, So not to drown in defeat,
When He returns as He as promised, Eternal Life will be so Sweet!


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Jeanne E Webster 06/07/09
I can hear your bitter grief for the loss of your dear sister. So sad.

A bit of work on the rhyme and meter to make for a smoother read.

A good job of writing!
Sara Harricharan 06/08/09
Hmmm, nicely done. I think if you have a specific format (two lines, four lines, or something inbetween, etc) it might carry more impact. I liked how you had the repition of sweet and then bitter. Really well done, keep it up!
diana kay06/10/09
good idea for this subject. I can feel the mix of emotions in this