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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Bitter and Sweet (05/28/09)

TITLE: Come Sweet Spirit Come
By Florien Deysel


I am a broken child, since I can remember
No joy, no peace, no laughter,
Fear was part of my daily life,
Rape and abuse was the daily norm,

Since I can remember I longed for You,
I searched, I prayed, I cried, I read,
All about You Lord, all about You,
Still no relief, no answer, no safety,

The bitterness and hate in my heart grew
Stronger and stronger everyday,
Along with that unforgiveness filled my heart,
It fed me with an uncontrollable anger,

Thoughts of revenge was all I could think about
All my thoughts wanted to shout
But how do I do it, I am just a child
With no power, no will, no way out

Helpless, loveless, angry, filled with hate,
I wanted to turn to You and enter the Gate,
But if my parents didnít want me,
What made me think that You will love me,

Still, I longed for You, I wanted to fit in
Maybe Heaven will have a place for me
Maybe I will be accepted by Thee,
And maybe I will be a human being.

Once I gave you my heart, everything
You came and filled me with love,
Your gentleness amazed me,
Your sweetness surrounded me.

Now I am Yours, I belong to the King
I am a child of God,
To You I bring,
All my pain and suffering

And peace fills my heart,
Your sweet Spirit takes control,
And I know, that nothing can harm me now,
For You are my Daddy, You are in control.

Gone is the hate, the bitterness, the danger,
Unforgiveness fled before forgiveness,
I am surrounded by love and peace,
My Daddy takes care of me.

Still I live with a desire,
That they must be brought to justice,
Am I now playing with fire?
I want them to pay for hurting me, how can they just walk away free?

Lord, dear Lord, Help me please,
I donít want to burn
I want some peace in return
I want to be strong, I want to be free

Revenge is a strong word, filled with anger
How do I overcome this and be the victor
I need you more than ever,
I need to be free from all the anger.

Let Your Sweet and Gentle Spirit flow
Let it come and make me whole
Set me free to be as sweet as Thee,
Fill me with Your loving kindness, Lord let it flow.

I pray for your forgiveness,
Take this anger and thoughts of revenge,
Fill my mind; fill me with love, sweet love
I pray this from Thee.

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Jeanne E Webster 06/08/09
Painful emotions scream out the wrongs that you want righted! I see the scared little girl as I read your memory pictures. Praise the Lord you have found peace and love, gentleness and security.

Your article will touch many hearts, I'm sure, as too many share in like events when they were young. However, many share in finding their heavenly Father, as you have. You're heading in the right direction with the "revenge"; leave it to God.

I am pleased to see how you have written this, helping the reader see the past and bringing them into your present. Keep writing; it's a good exercise and you're doing well.

Sara Harricharan 06/08/09
Good job here! I wanted all of that bitterness and all of the "bad things" to stop, but you did well bringing this to a close. Thanks for sharing!
diana kay06/10/09
i like the title to this peice because it brings a feeling of hope of somethibng sweet and gentle in a very painful place. Thanks for sharing this. I would like you to have not split it up into four line verses as it is mostly free verse and reads more like a prayer/mediation than a poem. It has no need to rhyme as it is more powerful with the lines as they are and my opinion is that longer "verses" would be fine and even vary the number of lines before a break. Well done though!