The Official Writing Challenge
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06/04/09
Lovely! Once I figured out where this was going, it was a great read. Thanks for sharing!
06/04/09
Well done. You make the characters in the story real and not just Bible characters.

This may be just my preference but I would have enjoyed more subtlety early on so the great reveal would have been Jesus. I like surprises, but that is my preference and your story is great like it is
06/06/09
A faithful retelling of a great story.
06/10/09
great story and really good "getting into the character". 746 words hey! but well rounded complete story there. well done!