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06/04/09
This is very well done! I like the interaction between the two, it is not forced and it feels somewhat realistic. The twist at the end is good and the analogy with the apples was excellent. Great atsmophere and very creative idea for the topic! Loved it!
06/06/09
You have two very colourful characters there. It would have been interesting to know what they were locked up for.
BTW Mt Horeb/Sinai is in Egypt. Saudi Arabia is on the other side of the Gulf of Aqaba.
Great character descriptions, and good message. Very creative take on the topic. Well done.
06/10/09
good and original. I just wonder what Joe was doing in prison but i guess i will never know!
06/13/09
READER: That's a good question. What do you think? In the story is Joe right? Is the real Mt. Sinai/Mt. Horeb
on the Sinai Peninsula or in Saudi Arabia?