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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Light and Dark (05/21/09)

TITLE: Sun and Cave
By Marylea Monroe
05/27/09


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Sun and Cave

Cave, called out Sun
Come up from under the earth
So dreary, damp and gloomy
Come and see my light

I do not understand, said Cave.
What light is
Such a thing I have not seen
What is the significance of your words

Cave, I would not endanger you
All this beauty brings such delight
To impart its radiance with you
Would bring joy to each of us

Sun, I have joy I love my home,
Beneath the earth I am quite content
What better life could there be
Darkness is all I have ever known

O Cave, no need to give up your home
Just a visit for a day is my request
Permit me to disclose that which
Until now you have not known.

Then you must come and see my darkness
There are beauties here to be seen
Streaks of gold and silver
Lining glistening walls of rock

Then one day Cave said,
I shall come up there Sun
In the morning to see
This sight I do not grasp

When morning came
Cave went above the earth
To visit Sun as he said
Instantly Cave recognized light

Sun was a satisfied guide

Sun, said Cave, it is time for me to go
Will you visit my domain now
Or must I wait

Cave, I will come with you now
To see that which I have never seen

Cave descended back beneath the earth
Sun followed

Sun, said Cave
See my darkness and all its beauty

Sun was confused

I see all the beauty, still
I do not understand darkness

As Cave looked around He understood
He now saw gold and silver lined walls
In a different light


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Jeanne E Webster 05/28/09
This would be easier to read and understand if quotes were used. Perhaps you could expound on what Cave saw above the earth?

Nicely ended! Sun was confused when it went down to see Cave's world, as Cave realized its darkness had disappeared. Crafty!
Jan Ackerson 06/01/09
Reads very much like an ancient fable--I wonder if it'd be even better in prose? Good job--keep writing!
Yvonne Blake 06/01/09
*smile* I love this narrative poem! The ending was perfect.