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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Retreat (as in quiet time away) (08/01/05)

TITLE: When i stop working
By Donnie Vaughan


While I was the head electrician with the local school system in the county where I lived,
We had purchased a large modular building that about ninety feet long by seventy feet wide. I had never wired a building this big before and one that had a thousand ampere rating for the service. We started early one Monday morning and for several weeks we continued to work in the very hot sun. During the summer months in the east, we do get some very hot days and it looked as if this summer was going to be the same . We had only five men in the crew and for once we all worked together to complete all the task.
I do not believe I have ever come this close to succumbing to heat stroke, as I did this year. Every day that went by I dreamed of a place so dear to my heart that I found myself looking off into space, then coming back to myself I resumed my work. I know that the other guys were not into all the work that had to be done but we knew that it was not going to be done with out us pushing to complete it.
It had been almost three years since we had been to our little paradise and that longer the days got and the hotter the weather got the more I knew I had to get away for some real needed R and R, I was real sure my better half would love to take that trip, for every time I brought up the idea of going on vacation she would mention Weaverville,N.C.
Oh, the clean air, the freshness you can feel, and the way the local people treat you as one of their own.
If I ever can get away from here for a while that will be my retreat from all of life’s
Problems, that means no phones, and no time clocks, but it looks like we will finish this building just about the time our school system starts back, and you know that is right.

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Linda Watson Owen08/09/05
If this is autobiographical, I hope you get your special retreat soon! :)
dub W08/11/05
I think there is a story to tell here. Find someone to help with grammar and structure and keep writing.
Shannon Redmon08/11/05
I am from Asheville, NC real close to Weaverville! It is a great place to retreat! Work on your structure because I think you have a great story to tell!
Shari Armstrong 08/12/05
A very nice slice of life :) Just a note -the tecnical things might be a bit confusing for some, but it worked. (my hubby's in construction so I followed it :)
Sally Hanan08/12/05
Nice little piece. It works better when writing for online works to space out the paragraphs, as in one white line between them.
Beth Muehlhausen08/13/05
Sounds exhausting! Paragraphing spacing would help the reader; also careful attention to sentence structure. Hope you can enjoy a much needed break from the hard work soon.....
Phyllis Inniss 08/15/05
I hope you enjoy your retreat when you stop working. In the meantime try retreating into yourself with positive thoughts to help you until such time that you stop working.