The Official Writing Challenge
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05/28/09
Great Job! The details bring the story to life.
"...she hoped that God would let butterflies into heaven. That way, me and Jesus can spend forever chasing them through the skies." Beautiful!

Excellent writing building to the conclusion.
06/01/09
Lovely, tender story.

For your readers' sake, an extra space between paragraphs would be greatly appreciated!

I loved the plot arc here--very nice!
06/04/09
an interesting and poignient story. In the UK the law does not allow familiers of donors to meet the recepients.