The Official Writing Challenge
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08/08/05
I like'd this story very much. I too, carry my burdens instead of letting Him.
Filled with truth and reality! And I like the unifying 'Ah-h' at the beginning and end.
Good story, and true to life.
08/11/05
Good story, fairly well presented. Get an editor and clean up the glitches and you have a contender.
The business of life can be overwhelming and our only rest comes in the Father! Good message!

08/13/05
Well told - and a reminder how important attitude can be!
This struck me deeply: the key to hope is gratitude and acceptance. Some grammatical errors could be minimized with a little counsel from an editor! Great thoughts: "She had been trying to carry a heavy load that was already carried. She had been striving to do something that had already been done. She had been working so hard to complete a task that God had completed so perfectly."
08/20/05
Ah-ha! How the focus changes when we allow God's light to shine down! So many of us can relate to that strangling cord. Thanks for sharing. Good writing, too!