The Official Writing Challenge
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05/31/09
Good allegory!

Be careful of it's--with the apostrophe, it means it is. If you want the possessive, there's no apostrophe (think of his and hers to help you remember).

Even though this was clearly allegorical, I'd have really enjoyed some more details about your characters and your setting. Your writing is very good.
05/31/09
Hallelujah! The Lord has come. What a great presentation of this eternal truth.

I enjoyed your writing very much. Do it again.
06/03/09
Good story! I think i would have liked it to be a real rescuer with a light rather than the story disolving into fantasy but that is because I prefer that syyle of writing and I think that is where it was leading and so was dissappointed when it turned.