The Official Writing Challenge
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05/28/09
A short, cute piece! This could be expanded a little bit more too, to bring the reader closer to this baby. Nice job! ^_^
05/29/09
Prescious. It left me wanting more so I can connect with this little one. I love this! Grat job!!
05/29/09
A simple little piece that would make a nice children's story.
06/01/09
I loved your POV, so sweet and innocent; trusting! I had a feeling you're MC was an unborn child. Very good.
06/01/09
This reads like a great entry for a children's book. I can picture the illustrations in my mind while reading your story.

Keep up the good work.
06/03/09
lovely. short and sweet. I dont think it needed any more expansion. I liked the use of the first person (I) in this story.