The Official Writing Challenge
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05/22/09
I like this peice of writing. It is a clever use of the before and after. I am not sure about the title and the first and last part about luck that doesnt fit in for me.
Hi Bryan,

I like the symmetry in this piece. It works well. You lead slowly up to a very good ending.

I appreciated your remarks on my "Crying in the middle of the night"piece. You were not alone in your assessment that the story ended too abruptly. I'm working on rewriting it as part of a short biography I'm writing on my own. You'll know a little more about it by reading "My life as a cat" parts one and two. It's hard for me to put all these short stories together into a coherent story; sometimes it's too painful to write about as well. I don't have a neat ending either because I'm still here, and still struggling! Thank you for your encouraging words.