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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Before and After (05/14/09)

TITLE: The Colt
By Nancy D'Costa


His brothers were staring at him with an incredulous look on their faces as the owner placed a load on his back. They seemed to think ‘what a change in this sissy!’ Till yesterday all, including his owner, considered him to be a good-for-nothing The owner’s son used to invariably aim a kick at him whenever he passed by, calling out to him ‘you useless dunky!’. He had been so pale with an ugly coat, and looked like a foal, while his brothers worked.

Was it just yesterday that he was standing tied at a dirty useless spot to brood at his miserable existence? Even then his mind had dwelt on the group of thirteen men who had passed by him two days ago. He had suddenly gazed at a pair of most beautiful eyes! It was the first time that he had seen so much love and compassion in the eyes of a man. They seemed to look right into his miserable heart and read every feeling of pain and unworthiness. He recalled how, on reflex, he had bent his fore-legs and prostrated. He wondered why he had done that!

Then in the noon yesterday, two men from the group had come to him. One of them had pointed to him two days ago, commenting that he had never seen an uglier colt anywhere. As they started untying him he had heard the owner’s son ask them ‘why are you untying it?’ and the two men had replied ‘the Lord needs it.’ As he let him be taken, the owner’s son had muttered ‘Good riddance, keep him. We would save on the fodder.’ He had felt like crying at such terrible insults but who cared for his tears? Even he himself had come to believe that he was absolutely useless.

Just as he had begun to wonder where they were taking him, they had reached the owner of those beautiful, compassionate eyes. He couldn’t stop himself from prostrating before the man. One of them had cursed him loudly giving a painful whack on his back. He had closed his eyes as tears welled up in his eyes. He had opened them when he had felt the gentlest hands holding his face and wiping his tears. The smiling, radiating face of the man had bent and kissed him on the forehead. For a moment he had forgotten everything and experienced the love flowing from those hands to his heart cleansing him from all the misery, leaving him overwhelmed with bliss at touch of the man whom they called ‘Lord’ and ‘Jesus’.

Others had thrown their cloaks on his back and he had gathered that the man called Jesus intended to ride on his back. He had panicked. What if his weak legs gave way? What if this wonderful man fell to the ground and got hurt? He couldn’t think of it! He had felt so unworthy to carry him that he had wished that his handsome father was there in his place.

Then he had experienced a gentle, reassuring hug and Jesus was on his back! Just as panic had started rising in his belly, a strange sensation had pass through his body. The man had felt so light and his own legs so strong! Was this really he, who had tripped and fallen even under the lightest weight and walked with a tottering gait? People had cut branches and placed them, and even their own cloaks, before him to walk on! What a royal treatment for a donkey that had been considered useless?! He had heard people around him shouting ‘Hosanna!’ and other words of praise. Suddenly he too had felt like it and found himself braying with joy in praise to the man on his back!

On reaching the temple, he had wanted to go with Jesus and be with him always. But Jesus had given him a loving pat and had asked him to be taken back. Now that he happily walked under the load on his back, he mulled at the change that had taken place since yesterday. His owners had discovered that he was of much use! His brothers had come and brushed their noses lovingly to his. Of course there were some people who still spoke insultingly but he never felt hurt. He knew that he would always remember those loving compassionate eyes and be at peace.

(Bible reference: New International Version: Luke 19: 28-38.)

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Allison Egley 05/24/09
Oh, I love this!

A few minor grammar or wording issues, but certainly nothing major.

Great job with this one!