The Official Writing Challenge
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05/24/09
A very interesting poem. You structured it in a curious way. The middle line in the first verse has a slight typo though, "lay" should be "lays" to be accurate in the tense you're using it. ^_^

I liked the last verse best of all though. Thanks for sharing this!
05/24/09
Good job!