The Official Writing Challenge
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05/21/09
A few grammmatical errors here and there, but overall a good story. I liked the character of April a lot and would have liked to know what happened after this retreat/rally. Good stuff.
I praise GOD that Has chosen to be merciful to us and has caused Him the HIGH COST of the gift of salvation for all. It has caused Him separation from His only Begotten Son, Jesus Christ: who by His patient pursuit, obeyed His Father unto death so that we might be saved.

May the high cost of this precious gift of mercy and pardon draw us to Jesus Christ as we follow and abide in Him in full surrender unto eternity with our Heavenly Father.

1 Pet.2:24

Thank you for sharing.

05/22/09
This is an important before and after story--you have the kernel of an amazing transformation. Watch your spelling, grammar and punctuation and it will be more powerful. Try to find someone to proofread for you before you submit.