The Official Writing Challenge
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05/17/09
Oh, I liked this one. I could really feel the tension, and the dialogue was good too.

The last paragraph could be rephrased a bit, I think, to help it flow.

Great job. I'm glad there are still some "good Samaritans" out there too!
05/20/09
wow very dramatic and gripping!