The Official Writing Challenge
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05/07/09
This was a great little story. I really enjoyed it! Keep them coming!
05/08/09
A sweet story with a bit of melancholy in it. I liked it.
05/09/09
I liked how you allowed us to look into the lives of this couple. I liked what I saw. Some fairly good dialogue as well. Well done!
Great believable dialogue and descriptions. I like the sounds that come alive from the chair. There is a tenderness here and I'd like to see more of this. It's interesting and drew me as a reader to want to venture on the porch with them, to listen to their stories and memories. I'd like to see maybe a visitor or someone who makes their day happen by who lifts their lonely spirits:0) Nice job!.
Quiet, serene, lonely. Nicely written-I too would like to see more.
Blessings, Patty