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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: In and Out (04/30/09)

TITLE: Ma, Pa and the Creech
By D. Phenes
05/06/09


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“Creech, Creech” came from our rocking chairs as we sat on the porch that early spring day. As usual, Pa was deep in thoughts as he stared out across our land. We have lived in this old house for fifty years and many days have been spent rocking our cares away on this porch.

“It seems like we spend more time at home these days.” I thought to myself.

All of a sudden my private thoughts were interrupted by a loud sigh. Pa had let out a sigh and I knew he was going to speak. He was a man of few words, who kept most thoughts to himself. Patiently I waited for Pa to share his own thoughts.

“Well Ma, winter is on its way out and Springs comin’ in quick like.” He spoke as if he had more to say.

“Out with the snow, in with the rain, out with the cold and in with the warm.” He stated as if he was the only one to notice the changes.

“Yes dear, the trees will be budding before you know it.” I added my two-cents into the conversation.

“I reckon God planned for these changing seasons, kind of makes ya think Mother.” He softly spoke as if it saddened him somehow.

“Is something troubling you dear?” I asked with a concerned voice.

We always seemed to know when one another were troubled. Fifty years we spent together and very seldom were we apart. This allowed us to know each other’s feelings before they even spoke it.

“You know me so well.” Lovingly my husband spoke as he gave me a knowing look.

“Seems like we have always been in each other’s lives, nothing ever changes with us.” He added to the conversation.

“Well, that is alright with me Pa! I don’t care for changes.” I once again gave my two-cents.

“Me neither Ma! It’s just so many have been in and out of our lives. We see them and spend time with them and then they are gone before you know it. Makes one feel a bit sad.” Confessed my troubled husband.

“It has been awhile since we’ve had visitors. The children and grandchildren are so busy with their own lives. Even the folks from church do not visit anymore.” I sadly recalled.

I had suddenly realized what it felt to be forgotten. My thoughts were now as troubled as Pa’s thoughts were.

“I didn’t mean to upset you dear, I’m here and I aint’ leaving anytime soon. Lord willing of course” he added.

“Yes darling, you and my Jesus are always here and will always be a part of my life. Makes me think of that verse in Matthew that says “... for lo I am with you always, even unto the end of the earth. “

“Creech, Creech” Pa’s chair started creaking again as he let out a contented sigh.


Matthew 28:20 KJV


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Verna Mull05/07/09
This was a great little story. I really enjoyed it! Keep them coming!
Jan Ackerson 05/08/09
A sweet story with a bit of melancholy in it. I liked it.
Lollie Hofer 05/09/09
I liked how you allowed us to look into the lives of this couple. I liked what I saw. Some fairly good dialogue as well. Well done!
Janice Fitzpatrick05/11/09
Great believable dialogue and descriptions. I like the sounds that come alive from the chair. There is a tenderness here and I'd like to see more of this. It's interesting and drew me as a reader to want to venture on the porch with them, to listen to their stories and memories. I'd like to see maybe a visitor or someone who makes their day happen by who lifts their lonely spirits:0) Nice job!.
Patricia Herchenroether05/12/09
Quiet, serene, lonely. Nicely written-I too would like to see more.
Blessings, Patty