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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: In and Out (04/30/09)

TITLE: "In & Out of Love"
By Machele Harrison
05/06/09


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“In & Out of Love”


I looked out one day,
but the sun did not rise.
All clocks had stopped ticking.
What a terrible surprise!

I picked up the phone
but could not call out.
The lights had failed too,
in the neighborhood throughout.

My wife tapped my arm;
Why didn’t she speak?
All seemed so quiet,
and my voice was so weak.

No sound could be heard,
and the smog was so thick.
What was happening?
Why did I feel sick?

I reached for my Bible,
but it could not be found.
How could this occur?
No air, light, or sound?

I sensed God was tired
and needed a break.
But, why would He do this,
and a world He loved shake?

To no longer hold us,
What would we do?
Could we trust any promises
of eternity too?

I woke up in tears…
Thank God from a dream.
I thought He had left me;
with my soul to redeem.


I fell down before Him
and honored His name.
I looked at my own life
and felt so much shame.

“God, you’re here for me always.
You never forsake.
You’re love is a blessing.
You’re heart never strays.

I know I have hurt you…
My sins, I confess.
But to you I now offer
my life, nothing less.

So, help me to not waver,
or fall in and out of love.
I can trust in you always;
My dear Father above.”


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Jan Ackerson 05/08/09
I was very intrigued at the beginning of this poem, wondering what could have happened. Clever idea.

Try to avoid some common writing cliches: the "it was only a dream" ending, and in poetry, rhyming "love" and "above". You're a good writer--stretch to the next level of creativity!

The poem has an excellent message.
Verna Mull 05/08/09
This was a really great poem. The change of rhythm bothered me on verse 10, (I think that is the one) They rhyming switched from one style to another. Other than that, I thought it was perfect! Good job!