The Official Writing Challenge
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05/08/09
I found myself wanting to know Abigail better!

There's a lot of "telling" here--perhaps a more defined plot or some dialogue would help to show your readers more about this couple.

A great start--keep writing!
05/14/09
You have some interesting thought in this, although they seemed a bit jumbled. A little dialogue or plot would help. Keep writing.