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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: In and Out (04/30/09)

TITLE: The Weary Traveler
By Karey Schaitel


The Weary Traveler

Aubrey quickly pulled into the small church parking lot three blocks from her apartment exhausted and ashamed. The canopy of trees and the mass of cars provided a necessary shade from the possible watchful eyes of her searching boyfriend. Endless tears collapsed down her smudged, blotchy face. "Where had the time gone?" she thought. "How could I be so stupid? What is wrong with me?"

She could not continue this way she knew, but where could she go from here? Her thoughts flashed in and out of the last three years. She had been so sure of herself and her future, especially with her impending marriage to Kyle, so there was no hesitation when he asked her to move in six months ago. With this thought, her tears found a new source as the pain deepened. Kyle was sure he did not love her; at least this is what he said when confronted by the evidence of the incriminating emails and text messages between him and Jessica.

The very next thought took direct aim at the most tender but intensely raw part of her heart, the reality of her misguided behaviors. The change was gradual but unmistakable. Small compromises, little white lies to parents and seemingly insignificant decisions screamed hypocrisy.

Even though she had been Bible-drilled, Church-trained, rededicated and dunked, her Christian life remained unremarkable. She knew all the right answers in Sunday school, had memorized multiple verses and had walked the aisle three times. She was convinced she led a good life, but her life had not been transformed.

Immediately, the warm, melodious tune jerked her attention from her arduous thoughts to the church building. The "Old Rugged Cross" became clearly distinct in the humid air. Before she had time to fully consider her actions, Aubrey was sitting in the back pew.

The pastor walked to the podium and addressed the congregation. He described how all people "like sheep have gone astray" and how "there is none that doeth good." (KJV)

For the first time in her 21 years, Aubrey heard the law explained and realized the extent of her depravity before a holy God. She was a liar, a blasphemer and an adulterer at heart. The pastor turned and pointed at the cross above the baptism, illustrating the sacrifice and resurrection of Christ, the God-man, for the sins of humankind. On her knees, before her maker, she repented and trusted the Savior; a wave of fresh tears began.

Aubrey walked in the door of Good Shepherd Bible Church a weary traveler and walked out the door a newly born lamb.

John 10:9 "I am the door: by me if any many enter in, he shall be saved and shall go in and out, and find pasture." (KJV)

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Jan Ackerson 05/08/09
Wonderful ending (and new beginning) for Aubrey!

Some of your word choices are iffy; I noticed especially "collapsed" and "arduous" that didn't seem to be quite the right words. Work on showing, not telling.

I love how God sometimes directs us to just the right place at the right time.
Myrna Noyes05/11/09
I appreciated this inspiring little story, with its message of hope for the weary! We all come to various crossroads on our life journeys, and I'm glad Aubrey made the decision to follow the right path--the narrow Way to heaven!