The Official Writing Challenge
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05/10/09
EXCELLENT writing!

Only thing that might improve it would be a few eye-saving spaces between paragraphs, please?

Absolutely outstanding for this level; I'd expect to read this in Advanced or Masters.
Very well written. I didn't expect the suicide. Wow! Great heart punch and rising climax within dialogue and position of onlookers, or "listeners" from the youth group. Thought provoking piece. Wow! God bless your writing.:0)
05/14/09
This was indeed a well-written story of high quality. Such a sad message but truthfully told. Congratulations on your well-deserved recognition.