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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: In and Out (04/30/09)

TITLE: The In Crowd
By stephanie erickson


The In Crowd

My name is Sherrie ( sounds like sure ree), I’m in my senior year at high school, not only am I looking forward to being done with school but I want to make some great connections this year, ya know, I want to be part of the in crowd. In the past I have been miserably shy but I have come a long ways. I am ready for the popular adventure!
So, I finally got the nerve to talk to Stacia (she’s only the most popular girl in school!) and we actually liked each other. Wow! I am on my way to being in! She is a pretty, black haired, brown eyed, cheer leader. Not like me, simple brown hair, eyes ya know totally plain.
Okay, so I got invited to this party, I was so excited! One of the hottest guys was there, Jonathan Moore. Just the chance to be at the same place he was, was a total thrill! The party started out fun enough, food, dancing, talking, and just having a good time. Then, Stacia started throwing up; turns out she was drinking vodka and orange juice. Not so smart. Around that time, one of the other girls I hang out with, Lanae, asked me if I’d like a beer. I am not much of a beer drinker, yikes I am only 17! But, Jonathan was standing right by her when she asked, he looked right at me. So, I said sure, I took one drink only because I felt so guilty. I mean I know it’s against the law and all; and after seeing Stacia’s joyful side effect, I am not so interested in alcohol at all. I just carried my beer around to look cool, even though I wasn’t seeing a lot of coolness going on. I kept a smile on my face and tried to act like I was having a good time but I felt fake….untrue to myself. Stacia was kissing this guy I have never seen before; Jonathan must have smoked a whole pack of cigarettes and he was kind of crude. Then it happened; the cops received a tip from a neighbor I suspect, kids started running in all directions not caring who they ran into, I just stood still not knowing what to do. Big mistake, cause when the cop found me…guess what….I was still holding that dumb beer.
Several of us got something called MIP’s that evening. Talking to my parents about it was tough enough, they grounded me for two weeks to “reflect on my choices” and decide what is really of value to me. They felt the MIP was consequence enough otherwise. So, I guess I have reflected. I value fun, intelligence, great conversation, adventure, and being genuine. I am not getting that from this “in crowd.” So today I have made a decision, no more in crowd for me, it’s time to get out!

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Jan Ackerson 05/10/09
Great job with the teenage voice.

I wonder what this would be like if you included dialogue, and helped us to experience the party as it was happening, rather than "telling" us about it after the fact.

Good discussion-starter for a youth group.