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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: In and Out (04/30/09)

TITLE: Like my Mom
By Gordon Lavoie
04/30/09


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It seemed to me that if I wasnít going out the door of my doctors office, I was going in. I wish I hadnít moved across town now, having to take the subway wasnít my favorite pastime, but I wasnĎt going to change doctors at this stage of the game. Public transit was slow, but it did give me time to gather my thoughts and consider what was really important in this short life. All these doctor appointments, all this in and out of his office for tests, no doubt brought to mind my mother. Seems like so many years ago. What am I saying? It actually was so many years ago. I was just a child, and so self centered, four I think. Iím doing it again, I donít have to think, I know I was four, there is no mistaking that, almost Twenty years ago.

Despite the fact that Mom and Dad explained it all to me quite clearly, it never really sunk in. I was much to young to understand, all I cared about was me. All I knew was mom wasnít feeling well a lot, I knew she had to lie down most of the day, and she couldnít pick me up. I knew she had swelling, I knew I was left with a baby sitter I never liked, every time Dad took her to the doctor. What I didnít know and couldnít comprehend, is why. I remember praying, but I donít remember answers.

Now Iím having the same troubles that my mother had. The doctor told me times have changed though, medications are much better, diagnostics have improved greatly, and if I may quote him, ďwe just know more.Ē All very reassuring. Still, there is some queasiness and I have to rest more than normal, just like my momma did, and I canít lift any thing to heavy, same thing my momma went through, and of course it goes without saying, there will be some swelling, just like my mommas. But doctor said, ďdonít worry, youíll make it through, just like your momma did.Ē After all he was momís doctor too.

That reminds me, I should call her as soon as I get home. Her and sis will be wondering what took me so long. I just had to stop for that pickles and cherry ice cream, there is no denying these cravings you get. Babies doing well though, doctor said even though I have trouble carrying her, if I take care, I and little Sue will be just fine.

Yea, I named her after my baby sister. Donít tell Susan just yet, sheís going to graduate from college around the same time little Sue is born, and itís my gift to her. I think itís the least I could do, after all, I was so mad at her for those nine months she was inside my mommyís Tummy making her sick. And I guess the other reason is. Do you remember that prayer I said I didnít get an answer to? Well my sister was the answer, and the little Sue inside me, is another answer, to a whole lot of prayer.


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Janice Fitzpatrick05/07/09
This is tender and I like the little suprise near the ending. At first I thought the mother was sick with an illness, but nothing that nine months won't cure.:0) Nice job. Other than shortening the paragraphs a bit this is a good read.:0) Cute!!
Glenda Lagerstedt05/07/09
Good job of keeping the reader involved and in the dark until the end.
Beth B05/07/09
Waht a cute story! Thought it might have a sad ending until I read about "stopping for pickles and cherry ice cream." I won't let Susan know about the surprise. haha
Carolyn Summerset05/08/09
The ending was such a relief! I got to the pickles and ice cream and simply knew! Beautiful story! Best Wishes with Baby Susan! :)
Faithful Okoye05/09/09
oowuh. I totally thought it was an ailment, sickeness. You numbed me on a surprise when you said, "oh i should be calling her now" (or something like that) I had thought her mom was dead. It felt like a miracle.
Thanks for that surprise.
Jan Ackerson 05/10/09
Charming little story.

Watch out for using 'to' instead of 'too', and for those pesky comma splices.

Loved the bit with the pickles and cherry ice cream.
Karlene Jacobsen 05/10/09
As stated already, I thought Mom had an ailment or something; at least until you interjected that Mom said it'll be ok and then the pickles and icecream. I don't know about anyone else, but you've GOT to be pregnant to want to mix those; Yukk. LOL.