The Official Writing Challenge
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04/18/09
This is a very cute story with a good lesson. Just my opinion, but I think it would have been better if you had left out what the parents were thinking about their mom trying to get them back in church. Kept the interaction with the kids and grandma. It was so well-written. Very, very good. I felt like I was there with them. I love the twist with the uncooked eggs. Very good:)
I enjoyed your article. I agree that the interaction or thoughts of parents about their mom should have been left out.