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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Hot and Cold (04/09/09)

TITLE: Hot Tub Adventure
By Debbie Thorkildsen
04/13/09


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“No, not now. Not today. What am I supposed to do now?” I guess the only thing I can do is get back into the hot tub.

I have no idea how long I will have to wait for my little one to rescue me. She was so tired when I put her to bed. I’m glad she’s sleeping in. She needs the rest.

The day had started out so uneventful too. I had slipped out of my pajamas and into the hot tub we had recently put in our garage. I hadn’t bothered with a bathing suit since I was alone. My family was preparing for work and school. No one would miss me for a few minutes. Just when I went to get out of the hot tub, my family was at the door preparing to leave. I thought I’d wait to get out until they left. My husband came out to the tub to kiss me good-bye and they were off. I heard the car doors slam and the engine start. Once they were safely gone, I got out of the tub.

Now I have a problem, my husband had inadvertently locked the door to the garage. I can see through the window into the house. The keys to the locked door are on the bench on the wrong side of the door. There is no way for me to get them. I notice the house door was left unlocked. One of my girls must have been the last one out. I have to get out of here before the repairman arrives.

I go through my options. I can wait for my youngest daughter to wake up and let me into the house. I can go out the side door on my neighbour’s side, through about three feet of snow in my bare feet with nothing to cover my nakedness but a thin towel, and around the garage to the front door, in plain view of all my neighbours who are leaving for work. I think this is a little more of me than anyone needs to see this early in the morning. I can open the large garage door with one hand while clinging to my thin towel with the other and go around to the front door and into the house. None of these options are ideal, but waiting for my daughter to wake up seems to be the least intrusive to my dignity.

I decide to get back into the hot tub and get warm. It is cold in the garage as it usually is in February. I get out every few minutes to see if my youngest daughter has gotten up yet. The cement floor is so cold on my feet. Ice forms immediately when the water drips onto the floor. I can’t stay out of the water for long. I need to get back into the hot tub to get warm. All of this in and out of the hot water and into the cold air presents another problem. I now needed to go to the bathroom.

I need to assess my options again. I can ‘go’ in the hot tub and know I am sitting in that during my leisurely soak. I can ‘go’ on the floor and let it freeze there in a yellow puddle for everyone to see until the spring thaw. I can find a container to relieve myself into. Thankfully there is a disposable coffee cup in the garbage can. I can use that if I really need to.

Back into the hot tub to get warm. Back out to see if my little one is awake yet. Back into the hot tub to get warm. Back out to find that disposable cup. Now I’m locked in the garage with my disposable cup of warm yellow liquid. It makes me want to get out even more. I’ve been in this garage for about an hour now. I need to get out of here. The repairman will be here soon.

Back into the hot tub to get warm. Try to sit patiently. Wait…was that a little blonde head I saw. Quick, out of the hot tub, get to the door. Slip on the ice. She’s awake. Bang on the door. Is she able to unlock the door? “Please, God” …Click. “Thank you, Lord.” I’m free. I’m out of that cold garage and into the bathroom to get rid of the contents of my disposable cup…


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Miriam Basye-Carter04/16/09
An interesting and humorous little adventure. Seems very true to life. The only suggestion I can offer might be to give the awaited daughter a name so you don't have to repeat "youngest daughter" so often.

God's best to you in your writing!
Laury Hubrich 04/18/09
Well, that certainly was an adventure. Maybe a little bit more information than we really needed to know in some spots, though;) Good story.
Deborah Porter 04/24/09
Hi Debbie. I just wanted to leave a quick note to let you know your entry, "Hot Tub Adventure," actually did very well in the Hot and Cold Challenge. Although you didn't receive an award, you made it into the Highest Rankings for Level 1, placing 9th in that Level. There were a lot of entries this week, and competition in Level 1 is always very intense, so well done.

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:
http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=25299

The highest rankings are posted every Thursday evening on the Message Boards.

Again, well done. :-)

Hope to see you at the FaithWriters' Conference in August.

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)