The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice poem. Cheerful tone. Well-written.
Wow! Very creative. Good job

I think you made a tiny mistake but with great significance:


"How we must give our hearts to Jesus,
Who paid the price for what we deserve!"

He paid the price for what we don't deserve.

I think that's what you wanted to write. Maybe you have another meaning but apart from that, i love your poem. Thanks
03/23/09
What I like about this poem is the fact that it is preachy. It's not there just to entertain.
May I encourage you to read widely within FW and see how other people construct their poems, especially with regards to using a richer range of language. You've clearly got the passion, all you need now is the polish. Well done.
03/26/09
Hi Verna. Just wanted to leave a quick note to let you know your entry, "Where is Your Kingdom?" actually did very well in the Kingdom of God Challenge. Although you didn't receive an award, you made it into the Highest Rankings for Level 1, placing 10th in that Level. There were a lot of entries this week, and competition in Level 1 is always very intense, so well done.

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:
http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=24937

The highest rankings are posted every Thursday evening on the Message Boards.

Again, well done. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)