The Official Writing Challenge
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03/12/09
Thanks for sharing your view and experience of Africa. It is certainly a diverse and complicated land!
I liked your first sentence. It caught my attention, making me wonder what adventure I was to embark on. A unique perspective.
03/13/09
Thank you too - good story.
03/14/09
Africa is certainly a vast landscape, and you gave us a great overview.

I think it might have been better to focus on just one aspect and added more details to it. If you still like the idea of an overview, then perhaps devote one paragraph to each "section," again, adding more information.

Good job!