The Official Writing Challenge
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Well done! I like how the comandante realizes that there really is a Divine Intervention!:0) I especially like how he reveals to his comrades what has happened and seems broken and remorseful at the end. Nicely written! God bless!
I really like this article. Especially, how you tie their praying directly to the voice of God to the Commondante. Great job!
Nice. Really nice.
03/02/09
Excellent! You portrayed the setting and characters very well. Great writing!
03/06/09
You have done a good job of constructing your story. The conversation fits the emotion and you didn't spoil your divine ending. Well done. I hope you take advantage of the growing you can do here. If you ever get a negative gold box, just think of it as Diamonds instead of just gold. It will help you grow as a writer.
Good story. Scary situation with a powerful ending.