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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Car Trip (07/18/05)

TITLE: The Trip From Heaven
By Elisabeth Seiter



“Can we really go Mom?” asked John excitedly.

“I would like to, but the trip is so long I’m afraid you and your sister would get

restless in the car and start fighting and annoying each other.” Mom replied.

“That doesn’t make for a very pleasant trip to hear the two of you fighting in the back

seat . Then there is always the return trip…..”

“We can take our little DVD player and watch movies and our game-boy and stuff like


“Please, please, please we’ll be good. Right Sarah?” “I promise not to fight with you .

Go ahead you promise too Sarah” John begged. “I promise” said Sarah

“Come here Sarah, John sit here by me. I want to talk to you . This is suppose to be a

vacation. Vacations are for families to spend time together, talk together and have fun

together. If you bring your game-boy and DVD, or CD player you are not sharing in the

activities the whole family can participate in, you would still be playing alone. Do you

understand what I’m trying to say?” Mom explained.

“Yeah, I get it” John said sadly “You don’t want us to have fun!”

“On the contrary. Just think for a minute at all the times you have had the most fun.

They were when you spent time with family and friends at a picnic or at the beach.

Right?” mom said. “I guess so” said John.

“I have an idea. Let’s all plan together some games we can play in the car ride down and

different games for the car ride back. If you want to spend some quiet time you can each

bring a book to read.”

“I know what I would like to do” said Sarah. “How about we each bring a CD for us to

listen to in the car. That would work for the whole family. Right mom.”

“Yes, and that means you listen to my CD’s also.” Replied mom

“Your CD’s are only Christian music, mom” said John

“That’s right. That’s the music that refreshes the soul and fills the spirit. It gives you

peace inside as well.” Mom said.

“If it gets us to the amusement park its ok with me then” John said.

The week passed quickly as John and Sarah plotted and planned the car activities.

Dad in charge of driving as always carefully highlighted the map. It was hard for Dad to

participate in some of the games because he had to concentrate on driving.

This time though Mom’s activity started the trip. “I want each of you to pray out loud

whatever it is that you feel in your heart, and we’ll keep going around 5 times. I’ll start.”

“Dear God, Bless each of us with patience and care for each others feelings

“Dear God please help Sarah not to bug me.” Prayed John

“Dear God, please help John not to tease me.” Prayed Sarah

“Dear God, please keep us safe as we travel.” Prayed Dad

Just then the cars in front of us came to a complete stop. We inched forward in line for

about ten minutes until we came to an accident with a car on fire and one turned over. It

must have just happened. Mom started praying

“Dear God, please help the ambulance to arrive quickly to help the people in the cars.”

“Dear God, please help the people to get out safely” prayed John

“Dear God, please help the fire trucks to put out the fire.” Prayed Sarah

“Dear God, please keep us safe as we travel” prayed Dad

“Dear God, please comfort those who are hurt “ said Mom

“and let them get healed quickly God, they were going on vacation too. I saw the

suitcases on top of the car.” Prayed John

“Oh God, Sarah said crying, help the little dog whose running around so he won’t get hit”

No sooner did Sarah finish her prayer when a policeman came to scoop up the dog to


“Can we keep praying” said John and Sarah. Their prayers took on new meaning when

the focus was not centered on themselves. Soon they were praying for their friends whose

father needed a job, and their uncle who had cancer, and prayer had a new meaning.

Once we arrived at the amusement park and unpacked the car we went directly to

experience the thrill of roller coasters, water slides, rock climbing walls and ice cream

cones. Thoroughly exhausted we crawled into our hotel room and fell asleep. This went

on for two days. The trip home was to be the real test of promises.

Assembled together for the trip home John was the first one to say “Mom can we

pray first before we start our games? Promise not to tell anyone? I really do feel

better inside when we pray.”

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Nina Phillips07/26/05
That was truly inspirational and a good learning experience for children, and ME! God bless ya, littlelight
Shari Armstrong 07/30/05
A wonderful story!
Beth Muehlhausen07/31/05
A great training ground for the kids to learn and practice the habit of prayer. Well done.
Deborah Porter 08/02/05
Elisabeth, the message in this was SO good, which made it even harder when we found out that you had gone way over the maximum word count allowance for Challenge entries. Challenge entries have to be within 150 and 750 words. Your entry came in at 812. Please don't let this discourage you though. I hope you'll keep entering the Challenge. I'll look forward to seeing more of your work in the future. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)
Linda Watson Owen08/09/05
Wonderful story with a great lesson for us all!