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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: South America (02/05/09)

TITLE: Birds Of South America
By Yolanda Jackson
02/06/09


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Deep in the jungles of South America,while the Acient people beat their drums,and the fog free air filled the skies. There were three mumified bodies being exume from the acient land.
"Be very careful with that" shouted a worker to another as they carried the bodies to a unknown location.Suddenly a movement from one of the bodies caught the eyes of the worker.
"did I just see that body move?"asked the worker to another.
"I think all of this fresh air is making you a little loopy" replied the worker.
Never the less the worker kept his eyes on the bodies as they were being pulled out of an Acient burial site.On the movement of the third body, the mountain began to let out an errie cry, and a flock of South American birds came racing through the skies.
"The dead has awakening" said one of the elders of the village.
without another word the elder and his klan took off; warning the workers to stop digging,and put the bodies back, but the workers were miff by the elders of the village, and brush it off as Folklore and Fairy tales.
The skies soon turn from sunshine to a misty gray, rain came down in buckets, the mud from the ground slither down the hill sides like that of a snake.The birds of South America appeared once more in their beeks they carried the heads of some of the workers,blood splatter on the ground from the necks of the severed heads, and up from the ground arose a mystical beast.nine feet tall, a disformed latern jaw,ashy gray skin, with a three feet golden grown on it's head.
"I command the bird of South America to dine on your flesh" said the beast, as roaches crawled from his lips.
Burials and Acient ruins holds a key to the other side,If you choose not to Respect them, then the punishment you must endure.


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Karlene Jacobsen 02/13/09
You could probably expand this more and really capture your reader. You have 750 words to work with.
Keep an eye on the tenses. There were a few shifts from past to present and back again.

This has the makings of a really great story.
Gregory Kane02/18/09
I wondered if there were tones of Indiana Jones here. Or perhaps a further sequel in the Mummy series!
On a more reflective note, I found your story somewhat disturbing. Stories in FaithWriters don't necessarily have to have a Christian theme - I myself have written about trolls and about dragons before now! But I was concerned that your story (probably unintentionally) seemed to glorify magic and the powers of the undead. Of course it's possible that it was all meant to be tongue-in-cheek (as in the Mummy trilogy) in which case I must have missed the humour. Feel free to PM me to discuss this further