The Official Writing Challenge
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01/29/09
Hmmm, this story begs more to be told. Nice job. Keep up the good work. ^_^
There is definitely a good message woven in the threads of this story. Good job.
In some ways, I can relate to your story... I agree with a previous comment... There is more to this story. Well written though.
02/03/09
I liked the way the husband came across as a very immature Christian--complaining, seeking redemption without a life change, and even thinking that Paul and Barney split due to a disagreement in the church. It might have been more topical if set in England or even Ireland with its host of competing churches, rather than the USA, but this is not crucial to the United Kingdom you've chosen.