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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Car Trip (07/18/05)

TITLE: The Wedding
By Dave Kemp
07/21/05


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A car journey.
A cold February day
A wedding day
In the back sits a 9 year old boy
His tenth birthday in 5 days
His loving mum with him
Two days ago, fifty four
Sharing the anticipation
Of a time of great joy.

Then the wedding
They first one the boy had seen
Not religious.
But the joining of people in love.
And then the reception.
Mother enjoying herself
As her son plays nearby
Neither, yet aware of the shock,
That would break both their hearts.

And as she danced
She fell, life drifting away
Suddenly struck
By a weakness in her loving heart
The young boy cries out, “Mum!”
But he is much too late.
She's gone like a blade of grass
Too shocked to even shed a tear,
He leaves her there, alone

Another car.
Going back home to dad.
“Will Mummy come?”
The young boy asks in his confusion.
Silence reigns in the car
No-one knows how to say
The hard words, “She’s gone now”
“You must learn to live without her”
Life has changed forever.


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Nina Phillips07/25/05
Lighthearted beginnings, somber endings. Very sweet but sad. God bless ya, littlelight
Linda Watson Owen07/25/05
You've dealt with a harsh reality in the confines of verse. Touchingly bittersweet.
Theresa Kissinger07/26/05
Life can sneak up on us just this way, hope there are is a future verse with the God's grace for the boy to grow beyond this sad moment. Good poem, maybe develop into a story.
Melanie Kerr 07/26/05
How sad! The short, abrupt sentences worked well in your poem.
Shari Brian07/29/05
This is very sad. A reminder of how short this life really is. Well written.

Shari Brian
Beth Muehlhausen07/30/05
What a shocker. Reminds the reader of the brevity of life, and how fragile it really is. The mixture of wedding joy and sudden death creates tension that must be reconciled at the heart level.