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Lighthearted beginnings, somber endings. Very sweet but sad. God bless ya, littlelight
You've dealt with a harsh reality in the confines of verse. Touchingly bittersweet.
Life can sneak up on us just this way, hope there are is a future verse with the God's grace for the boy to grow beyond this sad moment. Good poem, maybe develop into a story.
How sad! The short, abrupt sentences worked well in your poem.
This is very sad. A reminder of how short this life really is. Well written.

Shari Brian
What a shocker. Reminds the reader of the brevity of life, and how fragile it really is. The mixture of wedding joy and sudden death creates tension that must be reconciled at the heart level.