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So tender. I appreciate the heart of the son wanting to give to his mom.
One suggestion: when writing dialogue, try separate each speaker by (perhaps) their own paragraph.
01/22/09
I really liked "smallish child with biggish dreams." It just endeared the little boy to me. Good story.
01/22/09
What a fortunate mother she is!

I think this may be just a tad weak on topic--the story wouldn't change at bit if the last few words were, for example, Germany or France.

Nevertheless, it's a sweet story, with memorable characters.