The Official Writing Challenge
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I had ancestors who made that same journey, so I enjoyed reading this.

Be careful of your use of quotation marks and dialogue tags.

Charming children's story--I'd love to see it illustrated.
I enjoyed reading the dialogue between grandchild and Grandpa. Perhaps some descriptions would help me connect with them more. For example: Grandpa scratched his whiskers with forefinger and thumb, a twinkly in his eye as he thought of what he would say next. or The child giggled when Grandpa interrupted, "Who's telling the story anyway?"
Maybe not exactly, but similarly. This has potential to be a great story.
I loved this! There's something wonderful about grandparents sharing stories with grand kids. Sweet!