The Official Writing Challenge
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This was very well written, although, a little light on the topic. I cetainly enjoyed the read.The desription of Ms. Randall's stiffness was wonderful! Great job!
Although I never saw a soft side to the head nurse, I still enjoyed reading this. I really felt for your MC. :)
12/03/08
While the topic never came into focus until near the end, it was a captivating story. You have the ability to make the reader share in the emotions of the MC. Good job.
I liked the line "But dont you let her catch you saying that out loud"! Reminds me of someone else I know, just like that! Good characterizations!