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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Christmas Gifts (11/13/08)

TITLE: Mad Cow Christmas
By Connie Dixon
11/19/08


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Henry scribbled seven names on an old napkin as his nasty cigar smoke swirled upward through the shade of the reading lamp. Erma cracked a window and started the ceiling fan in an effort to conceal the abysmal ambience. Erma hated cigars. She’d endured Henry’s habits all these years and she just couldn’t seem to curb his appetite for a good stogie.

“What’ll we get the kids for Christmas this year, Erma? Is there anything they really need?”

Erma loved Christmas. She lived to spoil her two grown sons, their wives and especially the grandkids, Sadie, Noah and ‘Little Henry.’

“We can make a trip to Toys R Us this week-end and find something special for each of the kids. I have no idea what to get for the others. They already have everything they need or want!”

Henry scrutinized the list with that ‘look’ which frequently caused Erma to worry. I’d like to do things a little different this year.”

Erma loved Henry, but when he wanted to do something different, it made her nervous. Christmas was perfect just the way it was, and she did not want her special holiday spoiled by one of his eccentric notions.

“What do you mean ‘different’, Henry? What’s wrong with the way we always do it?”

“Erma, we can give shirts or tools, gift certificates……perfume for the girls………but have you ever noticed that we never see any of those gifts again? Everyone’s always grateful, they always send a nice thank you, but ‘things’ mean nothing to our kids. I’ll bet you $5.00 not one of them would remember what we gave them last year.”

Erma warmed her hands over the fire to counteract the chill from the open window. “So what’s your plan, oh Wise One?”

“Well, I would like to buy Henry Jr. and Donna a cow.”

Erma was mortified. “What? A cow? Are you mad? For Heaven’s sake, what would they do with a cow? Henry, have you lost your mind? They live in the city!”

He continued, “For Donny and Brenda, bunk beds.”

“Now I know you’re losing it. You know Donny and Brenda are not planning on having any children. Why in the world would they need bunk beds?”

Henry kept talking - to no one in particular. “….for Sadie a goat, Noah a lamb, and Little Henry…..five chickens. I promise you, everyone will love the idea.”

Erma shook her head and stared at Henry in disbelief. “Please tell me you’re kidding.”

“Do you remember that brochure we got at church on Sunday, the one with the holiday outreach opportunities?”

With a deep breath, she tried not to roll her eyes, “Yes, I saw it.”

Henry slipped his spectacles on and slid the colorful pamphlet out of his well-worn Bible. “Look Erma, $350.00 will buy a cow for a family in Asia. This cow will not only produce milk and cheese for a family, but those things can also be sold for income.”

Erma was listening.

“A set of bunk beds for one of our Sudanese families costs $250.00 - a goat goes for $55.00, a lamb for $60.00 and chickens, only $5.00 each. Don’t you think our kids would appreciate gifts given in their name to people who could really use some help?”

In one of those rare moments, Erma reached over and squeezed Henry’s hand. “I think you’re idea is wonderful.” And yes, I think the kids will love it. But what about us, Henry? I want to get you a gift.”

“Yes Dear, of course. Now for the pièce de résistance.” *Jesus said: "If you knew the gift of God and who it is that asks you for a drink, you would have asked him and he would have given you living water.”

“I don’t get it, Henry. What’s the catch?”

“For $1,000 we can give a Jesus-well that provides clean water for a whole village!”

“Oh Hon, this is going to be our best Christmas ever.”

“Ok, so put on your coat!”

“Why, where are we going?”

“Toys R Us! I think goats, lambs and chickens might be a lot more palatable if they’re accompanied by a couple of trucks and a Barbie, don’t you?”

“Oh Henry, can we stop at the Smoke Shoppe? I want to buy a big fat box of Don Diego cigars for my favorite husband in the whole wide world.”

And they lived eternally ever after.

*John 4:10 (NIV)


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Joy Bach 11/20/08
This is an awesome story. And so very close to my heart. I have actually done the same thing. You certainly set the scene vividly. Very good job!
Margaret Gass11/20/08
Your story brought back vivid memories of my grandma and grandpa, who routinely spoiled us--but Grandma allowed Grandpa to smoke his cigars in the house at Christmas. I love the fact that Grandpa wants to model giving to others but keeps a Grandfather's heart--toys for his little ones along with the lasting gifts for those in need. I am sure the grandkids will not forget the gifts or the love behind them. Well done.
Jan Ackerson 11/20/08
Very clever story! I enjoyed it a great deal--although I'm not sure "happily ever after" will last long if he keeps smoking cigars! Fun title, too!
Leah Nichols 11/21/08
Great story! You set the scene well with this one - the characters are very believable. I like their folksy dialogue as well. :) A few places with missing or extra punctuation, but overall it was quite well-written. Nice work!
Holly Westefeld11/24/08
I will be disappointed if this does not place. It tied for my favorite in Beginner this week.
Your characters are delightful, the dialogue realistic, and I love the concept of giving to those who truly have need rather than a gift for gift's sake.
The growth in your writing skills shines in this story!
Norma-Anne Hough 11/25/08
Well done on a lovely story. I hope you do well as you deserve to. I loved the way it turned out, you did have me guessing!!!
Love,
Norms
Catrina Bradley 11/25/08
Oh, I love this! Great characterization, especially Henry. The dialog is natural and fun, and the sentiment endearing. I LOVE the very last line - it made me giggle.
Catrina Bradley 11/25/08
I forgot to say - PERFECT and clever title. :)
Cat
Leah Nichols 11/27/08
I want to be the first to congratulate you on placing in the top 10!!! It's an awesome feeling, isn't it? Well, you deserve it - you definitely have the talent to write well! Great job!
Dianne Janak11/27/08
I loved the surprise and the joy that comes from giving from our hearts to those who need it most. This deserved a first place and an EC... Congratulations! I am so impressed with your writing skill!
Holly Westefeld11/27/08
What a wonderful way to blow out of Beginner! Congratulations!
Marijo Phelps11/27/08
I loved this - the stogie, the characters AND the ministry represented. Good story! Congrats on 1st and 4th place!
Margaret Gass11/27/08
Congatulations, Connie! Woohoo! I am so proud of you--first and fourth overall! I am not surprised. :-) Thank you for sharing your heart in every piece. You amaze me.
Joy Bach 11/27/08
Congratulations! What awesome writing.
Diana Dart 11/27/08
Yee Haw Connie!! Awesome piece, the opening paragraph was pefect, the story inspiring and the way you tied the stogies in at the end was the best. Great overall - big, huge congrats!!
Deborah Porter 11/27/08

Congratulations on your excellent win, Connie. Not only 1st Place in Level 1, but also 4th Place in the Editor's Choice. It's really an achievement for a Level 1 entry to make it into the EC, so well done.



Time to move up to Level 2 now.



With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)

Anita Paulsen11/27/08
YEA! You done good!!! This was so very well written. Congratulations, Connie. Good to see you "movin' on up".
Sharlyn Guthrie 11/30/08
Great job! Congratulations on your EC!
Loren T. Lowery 12/01/08
Well written and a well-served win. Congratulations, not everyone can write so well and engaging while delivering an important message. Loren


   
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