The Official Writing Challenge
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01/31/05
Excellent testimony! Thanks for sharing this truth.
02/01/05
Nice beginning and some powerful images. Who is he? I'm sorry but I got a little lost in this. Could you clarify it a little more. Best wishes with this piece.
Karen
02/01/05
thank you for sharing
Yeshua bless
02/06/05
Your writing talent is apparent but I also was a little confused. Maybe a bit more explanation of who "he" was...and also when you ran to the car I wanted to know why he had left (and taken the $$) and why had he come back? With some rework and a bit more tightening up, this could be an excellent piece. My advice is to keep honing your skill and develop your story-telling ability.
Thanks for posting.
Blessings, Lynda