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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Christmas Cards (11/06/08)

TITLE: One Special Card
By Connie Dixon
11/11/08


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Mike was seated at the deserted Thanksgiving Dinner table, overwhelmed by a mountain of Christmas cards received in previous years. He had dreamed of spending this day watching football and gorging himself with leftovers while his wife shopped with her girlfriend, but Cathy had reminded him of their agreement. Last year she had meticulously handwritten personal greetings to every person on their list, while he in turn addressed and sealed the envelopes. Now the tables were turned.

He cringed while reading some of the year-old messages from friends and family. A personal note from Aunt Karen read: Merry Christmas! Love, Aunt Karen. The note sounded so simple, so half-hearted, so……..trite.

The next was an expensive, foil-embossed work of art from his cousin Frank. The scribbled signature said something like: ………from Frank. Hmmm, way to go Cousin!

As Mike browsed through the holiday sentiments, he was disappointed in the lack of effort, warmth and sincerity shown by people who had otherwise made the attempt to send Christmas cheer. He was not yet inspired.

Amongst the cluttered accumulation, a news article sent by his mom worked its way to the top. It was a retirement announcement about Mrs. Kine, his first grade teacher. Memories of warm hugs and encouraging words, shrouded by the delicate scent of White Shoulders perfume - brought a smile to Mike’s face. He had been in love with Mrs. Kine - his first “crush.” Re-reading this article reminded him of the influence that the remarkable woman had had on his life and how he had never really shown gratitude. Thoughts of her began to motivate him:

Dear Mrs. Kine,

You probably don’t remember me, but I was in your 1st grade class in 1972. I was the little boy who sat in the front row so I could be closest to you. I always raised my hand even if I didn’t know the answer because I felt special when you called on me. I tried to stay after school almost every day to help you clean the black boards, or empty the trash cans or do anything you needed, but you would always tenderly escort me out the door so I wouldn’t miss my bus.

It’s taken a long time but I wanted to show my gratefulness by letting you know how much your kindness and compassion touched my impressionable little life. I used to think your name was Mrs. Kind because you were always so gentle and patient. You taught us kids how to be good neighbors – how not to fight and argue or hurt each other with harsh words. When I am with my own children, I hear your expressions pass through my lips as I try to instill in them a loving and caring attitude.

You trained us to wash our hands after going to the bathroom and before snacks, constantly reminding us that “cleanliness is next to godliness.” To this day I can’t even eat a candy bar without washing up first. You might be encouraged to know that your introducing me to God, even in subtle ways, gave me the desire to search for a higher power. Years later, I accepted Jesus Christ as my Lord and Savior and am currently serving Him in my church and community.

Mrs. Kine, you are truly an amazing woman and teacher. Because of your loving perseverance, I developed a fondness for learning and especially for reading. Today I teach Language Arts to 5th graders.

Thank you for dedicating yourself to kids by touching hundreds of lives and encouraging us with principles that continue to guide and compel us to do our very best. There is no doubt in my mind that I am a better person because of your investment in me. May you be blessed this Christmas.

Your #1 Fan,
Mikey Dickerson

Just as he completed proof-reading, his gift-bearing wife struggled to enter the back door.

“Are you finished with the cards?”

“Yes Honey, I’m done! Here it is!”

“What do you mean? It? You’ve only written one card since I left?”

Thoughtfully he responded, “After reading through all the cards from last year, I decided to start a new tradition. Each year I will write one card to someone who truly made a difference in my life – and this year that person is Mrs. Kine. If you really want to lick forty or fifty more envelopes, I will order a stamp for the remainder that states: Merry Christmas from the Dickersons.”


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Joy Bach 11/13/08
This is absolutely great! What a good idea. Teachers make such an impression on their students. Not all of them are like Mrs. Kine. Blessings on the ones that are.
Jennifer Reid11/13/08
Thank you for the lovely story. I enjoyed reading it. It was well written and presented.
Yvonne Blake 11/14/08
Good tradition! I'm a teacher, and I would love to get such a letter from one of my former students.
Good story.
Margaret Gass11/14/08
Thank you for sharing this. I could picture the scene perfectly, and I love how you've captured both your main character's frustration and his "Aha!" moment of inspiration. Our words and our actions should mean something. Mikey's taking time to write the letter shows the dedication of both teacher and pupil--what a gift!
Catrina Bradley 11/17/08
Sweet! It feels like there is truth in this story; very well written and a great story. I especially like "Mrs. Kind". :)
Diana Dart 11/18/08
Nice - I really liked the line about the memories being entwined with the perfume - "shrouding" was a fantastic word choice. Good story and creative take on the topic.
Anita Paulsen11/19/08
WOW.. This was so well written and in many ways inspirational. I found myself challenged to take up "Mike's" new tradition. This story made a difference in MY life. Thank you.
Leah Nichols 11/19/08
Excellent work here! A very powerful entry. I felt very engaged in this piece.

You could still eliminate some passive verbs - especially the first line....try "Mike sat" instead of "was sitting"....etc. Remember that the first line needs to pack a punch. Also try to tighten up the last line; it seems a bit abrupt to end in the middle of dialogue.

Nice work! I can definitely tell that you put your best into this one. Great job! :)
Laury Hubrich 11/19/08
Now that's a man for you! Very good job. And this is Teacher Education Week, too. At least in our school district it is. Not sure about everywhere:) Good timing;)
Joy Faire Stewart11/20/08
This entry is superb! The message is one of the best I have read. Great job!
Celeste Ammirata11/20/08
I love his idea about sending a letter to someone who meant something in his life. Very well written. You had me from the first word. Nice job!
Holly Westefeld11/21/08
Congratulations on placing sixth in your level. Your growing is showing. :-)
I enjoyed this poignant story. Your ending was perfect.


   
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