The Official Writing Challenge
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Good poem - you've got a pretty good meter here, although in places the rhythm gets a bit bumpy (you might like to drop into Jan's Masterclass on meter at the Message Boards)
Loved the last line!
A poem! I love your title. You did well on your rhyme, but the rhythm is off. Try to make the lines have the same number of syllables or beats. You may want to try other patterns of rhyming sometime to for variation.
This has a beautiful message.
This is beautiful. yes, I agree the rhyming is wonderful, just a little tweaking on the rhthym and you have a superb poem. I love the message and want to see more of your work. Keep it up!!!