The Official Writing Challenge
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10/30/08
Nicely done. I especially liked the phrase "her heart ripped a little more." Very good!

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11/06/08
Oh, my what a heart grabber! Having worked pediatrics for years I was totally drawn in. And to have daddy going for a cup of coffee and not to be there - very touching and wonderful! You will not be in Beginner's very long I suspect!!! Thank you!