The Official Writing Challenge
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11/01/08
It was intersting to find out this was a man talking through out. I noticed the story felt disjointed with the medical terms. Maybe you could rethink another way to explain what is happening along with the med/ talk. Good story but I was left wanting. Don't be afraid to use more detail and to really get into the story. Keep writing... you did good.
11/06/08
I have a rebuttal regarding the male or female voice in the story. If I would have read better I would have seen you stated wife. My apologies regarding that note.