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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Christmas Cooking/Baking (not recipes) (10/16/08)

TITLE: The aroma of dinner with all of the fixing
By mary bernard
10/20/08


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It,s that time of year again that food you can smell a mile away you have so much to eat , You don,t know where to start It,s so much to do and so many people coming over to eat your cooking let,s see after i put up my tree and decotrate the house and wrapped xmas presents . Clean my house go shopping for the food and xmas presents. It,s the most wonderful hoilday of the year everything is so magical oh! don,t forget i have to bake them xmas cookies for the children that coming over . I also, have to bake cakes pies to after everybody stuff their face and everybody is full we relax and watch football and maybe some want to play some games or maybe some just want to sleep i better get back in my kitchen and clean them ten pound of chicken and 20 pound of chittlings that smell my house up i need put a close pen on my nose and oh! yell i got to clean my 30 pound of collard greens that will smell up my house. What will i do with all that food after the hoilday is all over i will be eating on that food for a year when you cooking for the hoilday you need at lease 20 hands when iam cooking for so many peoples i feel like a octpuss excuse me while i set my table with my beauiful cystal glasses and my best china and expense sliverware for my guest every year everbody says that my table is prettiest every seen when everybody leaves they tell me everything was wonderful most of all the food see you next year merry xmas.


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Joshua Janoski10/25/08
Thank you for sharing this.

There are a lot of grammar errors and typos, but those are easily fixed. I recommend that you have someone look over your entry and point out these errors before you submit. That will help you catch problems that you may not have otherwise seen.

Also, adding some white space between ideas is a good idea to help your reader be able to follow your story easily. Please don't take these suggestions wrong. I am just offering them to try and help you take your story and make it even better.

Keep on writing! :)
Melanie Kerr 10/26/08
What a busy lady you are! There is so much going on in your kitchen!

Sometimes reading your story out loud to yourself helps you to pick up some of the errors.