The Official Writing Challenge
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I'm so glad that God gave this girl a sign that He is real by allowing her prayer for the pie to be answered.

There were a few typos and some missing commas, but those are minor things that are easy to fix.

Overall, this was a good story of hope and of God's love for us. Thank you for sharing. :)
10/25/08
I really enjoyed the message your story made, but it was slightly confusing and at some points hard to follow. When someone is talking I wouldn't separate it with indentions or paragraph breaks so that the reader isn't interuppted by trying to figure out who is talking or if they are talking at all. You have a talent and the story was good. Thank you.